FRIENDS
Everyday I sit with them
We tell jokes and laugh
Break the cookie in half
Sharing all we can
We support each other in tough times
If you ask I’ll give you a dime
I could never live without any of them
For through and through they are FRIENDS
THE TRUTH
A father and daughtrer
are supposed to have a special bond
A kindness thats more than fond
I’ve never known this but,
my father isn’t gone
No he’s right here
Drinking a beer
Everything is after I finish this beer,
after I finish this cigarette
I don’t know this man
The best thing he’s done
for me is give me life
I’m through with all this strife
TRUE LOVE
Love is true
True love is rare
So why do we strive
for our fair share
Though no one admits
All dreams start with this
True loves first kiss
Please share your opinion.
Chosen Answer:
Eh, if you want me to be honest, they’re not that great. The so-called emotion they are supposed to show is really flat, cliché, and boring. You need to work on actually feeling the underlying theme of the poem, rather than string words together for a random subject.
Also, your attempt at rhyming isn’t that great either. Either don’t rhyme at all, or make your rhyming better because this one is like a 8-year-old’s first poems. No offense if you’re 8 years old.
Your rhythm is very off. Try muttering the poem to yourself to get a good feel for the beats of it.